Judge comment from the Emerald City Opener contest:

Dear author: This is good; this is very good. I have no complaints or suggestions. Your writing is clear and clean, the pacing just right, the dialogue pertinent to each character. You've added enough internal dialogue so we wonder what's going on with each character, without telling everything in the first few pages. It makes the reader want to turn the page and read on.

Very nice job. Good luck!